First Script Draft - Annotations

SCENE 3 - Notes

INT – CORNER OF BARN – NIGHT

 Charlie is facing away from the camera. - Needs more description e.g. what charlie is doing.

CHARLIE:

Come on Tyler it’s not funny anymore.

Just come out already.

Please…

I hate hide and seek. - Show the emotions the character is feeling

BANG

The loud band startles Charlie as she jumps and turns round, in the process, dropping her phone. - Talk about the phone in the previous scene description as it is a key element in this scene. 

INT – FLOOR – NIGHT

 Charlie’s phone is lying shattered on the floor.             

The phone then starts ringing and vibrating coming up with ‘UNKNOWN NUMBER’.

INT – CORNER OF THE BARN - Say what time of day this is being filmed

 Charlie answers the phone and there is a split scene of both Charlie and the caller on their phones.

ANTAGONIST:

I have found your friend

(A creepy smile is twisted onto the caller’s face and they hang up)

- Mention Charlies reaction to the call

INT – MAIN BARN – NIGHT

 Charlie frantically runs across the barn towards the door they came in. When she tries to pull it open. She then starts to push and pull it. When that does not work she kicks and hits it. - Add more description to this shot.

CHARLIE:

(Grunting/crying/yelling)

SCENE ENDS